My Script... The 1st Draft

After developing the principle ideas for my script I have written a first draft for 'Hippophant' (which is here). The sad part of the story is that the script can be used by anybody else on my course to make as their final film of the year, and it will be hard to part with my 'baby'.

I feel that maybe I need to add more stylistic elements due to its obscure nature, which I have found difficult to do without directing the film. I am thinking of changing the end, to the protagonist in a police cell? Or possibly just back at home? So please read it and comment, telling me how I could possibly improve it or what you like about it!

Hope you enjoy the read.